雅思考試作文技巧及應(yīng)試步驟

雅思考試作文技巧及應(yīng)試步驟

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　　題目：

　　Now many people think that we are spending too much time and money on protecting animals. The money should be better spent on human population. Do you agree or disagree?

　　學(xué)生作文：

　　In reality, a large number of money have been funded on the development of human population in order to enhance the living standand. Although government and animal lovers have started to assist in conservation of animals, lacking of money and social awareness is still a key problem of animal conservation progam. now people should care and pay more for animals rather than living in luxury.

　　Government have put certain fund on wild animals, while a few part of them was spent on protecting animals legally. Instead, large account of money has been cost to murder them. eg. in scientific research, animals are more like victims whose body might suffer a lot even damaged through experiment in aimning of coming out a result from experiment, rather than lucky ones who can benefit lots care and love from hunman being. From long term view, government should not only spend money for current profits but aslo pay more for our generations.

　　Admittedly, although money has been gathered to set covervation program for animals, it is so limited that animals could not get a better care in zoos. Lacking of money is the mainly problem to maintain the running of zoos, which cause the animals have to transform to another area, and some of them could die for the frequently traving and uncomfortable weather. Animals are facing awful fate unless government could settle the financial issue by all means.

　　To sum up, animals lovers should do more effort to save the endanged animals especially rare species, by wakening up the social awareness and donating money. where people could save money for animals ,when we will get benefit from wildlife.

　　何鋼的評點(diǎn)：

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　　審題：現(xiàn)在許多人認(rèn)為我們在保護(hù)動(dòng)物方面花了太多的時(shí)間和金錢。這些時(shí)間和金錢與其用來保護(hù)動(dòng)物，不如用來花在人身上。你同意不同意這個(gè)觀點(diǎn)？

　　此題結(jié)構(gòu)與《高分作文》第8頁范文類似。在寫作這篇文章的時(shí)候，首先應(yīng)該分析我們目前在動(dòng)物保護(hù)方面的現(xiàn)狀：是否花費(fèi)過多，并提出自己的觀點(diǎn)。如果認(rèn)為的確花費(fèi)過多，要說說為什么。并且應(yīng)該進(jìn)行比較分析，為什么更應(yīng)該花錢在人身上。如果認(rèn)為花得值，那么要說說原因，然后談?wù)劚Ｗo(hù)動(dòng)物對于人類的作用和意義。